User blog comment:Pinguinus/The Game of Rassilon (Competition)/@comment-3538016-20140116005725

Here's what I have to say about POMfannumber's Time Bang. Turtlecake has already made many of the same points as I have, but I'll go ahead and post this anyway:

Plot: I too felt this was a bit rushed, sorry. :r What there is is awesome, but it is hard to keep up with at times. I'll award the plot with 6.

Originality: I love the idea of the intergalactic nightmare named "Gus". As far as originality is concerned, POMfannumber gets a solid 8. I would likely vote higher, but I feel Gus was not used to his full potential, and his origin was not explained satisfactorily enough in my opinion.

Readability: I had some of the same trouble with this as I did with Andrew's entry. In my opinion, prose will always be superior to script-writing for descriptive purposes. That said, Time Blast does a decent job of it. 5.

Characterization: The story was too short to include much characterization, and what there was did not seem realistic enough for my tastes. I feel that the characters took the events of the plot too smoothly, with not enough time to adjust. I thus give characterization a 5 in this case.

'''While I enjoyed the story, I feel there's some room for improvement. I award Time Blast with 24 total points.'''