User blog comment:Pinguinus/The Game of Rassilon (Competition)/@comment-24121492-20140115160429

POMfannumber1 Story:

Plot: 8

Originality: 9,50

Readability: 10

Characterization: 7,50

For the Plot,I can only give a 8,sadly.It felt way to rushed,and the endining was a bit....well not everything was explained.You said the screwdriver did return,but what about all the others things stolen?And there should had been a goodbye scene with The Doctor and Sarrah.It felt rush,but overall,good story.

For Originality,you have a 9,50 from me.Bringing Sarrah back(even if for 1 episode) was a good idea,and I don't think anyone did it yet(as far I know) in their stories.The Villian was good,but could've get a better name.

For Readability,here,you get a 10 from me.As you have the same writing style as me,I could read it very well.I finished reading it so fast cause of that.So yes,a 10 here.

Characterization:The lowest note I gave you on this(7,50).I am sorry for this,but I didn't really liked the talkings.It was,just like the plot,a bit rushed.The Doctor told Luke he's the doctor,but where did Sarrah knew it?A longer and better dialogue would had made it longer,making it not to be that rushed.Again,sorry for this.

If calculating all the notes I gave you,you have 35 out from 40.Myself,I think it's a good result,and I would be happy with it ;)

Good Luck!