Talk:8th Doctor Adventures/The Cylensers

Review:
It is an improvement. But what you need to work on is your dialogues. It just seems...rushed. Like when the Tardis realized she wouldn't be able to speak anymore(tell me again why would sending that message make her unable?), Molly and the Doctor both had a short line about it, and that was it.

"I wouldn't be able to talk anymore" "Well that sucks but ok"

was pretty much what happened.