User blog comment:Pinguinus/The Game of Rassilon (Competition)/@comment-27270572-20140115202651

The last but by no means least is POMfannumber1's story Time Bang on which I will show my vote for.

Plot: The plot was way too fast to fit in so many ideas. Although an interesting premise with Sarah Jane and Mike Yates returning I just felt the story was too rushed so I will have to give it a 7.

Originality: Gus was very original but not well explained. He only had a brief appearence which while awesome, it was way too brief to establish him. I felt Gus was very original so I will give the originality of Gus an 8.

Readability: I had the same problem with your story being in script form as MC13 but you did add more extra details with the coughing but I can only give you a 6.

Characterization: I felt the reaction's of Sarah Jane and the rest of her group were not surprised enough. Although the Doctor was realistic and his chat with Mike Yates was good I can only go on the short script. For characterization I will give you a 6.

So inconclusion I enjoyed the story but it felt too rushed and could have been so much more if you had made it longer. So overall you get a respectable 27 for the overly rushed story and it could be higher if we had more interactions between the Doctor and the others.